I am a junior student coming from Arts & Metiers ParisTech in France which is a mechanical engineering school and whose main task is cultivating general engineer. I have a good command of professional knowledge， and I am also capable in practice through study and experiment. However， I still long for a further study and improving professional skills， so I look forward to majoring in design of rotating machine at cranfield university in UK.
There are four reasons why I long for an further study in cranfield university. Firstly， I ache with desire to experience and have education of a comprehensive university which has professional studies in different majors rather than a general engineering school. Secondly， I need to improve my English urgently. It is of great help in job hunting mastering English， French and my mother tongue Chinese. Lastly， I realize that I have great interest in machinery， and generally speaking I have a good report at some courses in my first school year， such as stress analysis， bearing design and gear design， so the knowledge I have mastered laies a solid foundation for me to further study design of rotating machine.
I am confident I will have a good performance if your esteemed school would like to give me the entrance chance. On the one hand， my social experiences help me a lot. I have a good adaptive ability and I can merge into new environment quickly.
For example， I had no idea about French as a foreigner at the very beginning， and I had never been in touch with French when I graduated from senior high school. After that I started to study french， and I entered Arts & Metiers ParisTech after three years of study. My work experiences make me deal with interpersonal relationship very well. I worked in a Chinese restaurant in the past， and I alsoworked as a trainee at Photonics Bretagne.
On the other hand， I perform well at school. I have a good understanding in theory and I can understand the formula analysis thoroughly， moreover I like to share my opinions with members in group work， so I am competent for group work with students coming from different countries at Cranfield University. And I want to be a mechanical design engineer in motor corporation in the future， and majoring in design of rotating machine at cranfield university is of great help for the position.
In conclusion， I have strong desire to further study at your esteemed univeristy. I really hope I will have the opportunity to improve my professional skills as well as overall quality， and it is a great honour for me to study and practice at the honorable school.
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有一些申请者在motivation letter中描写自己的成就或能力的时候，仅使用空洞的词语，而没有提出任何实际例子。所以提供事实来支持自己的观点是第一要务，可是值得一提的是，并非只正式的研究活动或比赛才被认为项目， 课程上的比较大作业也可以作为研究项目，也可以在动机信上装点门面。
语法问题是一个我们常常提到的话题，而且这是国外学校的老师特别讲究的一点。在写作申请学校动机信时，学生一定要关注语法方面。进行认真的写作后，自己再审校几遍，如果觉得没必要，那也可以请你的同学或朋友帮你一个忙， 改正文书的语法错误。此外， motivation letter格式也是大家经常忽略的一个问题。即便学校没有对动机信格式的具体要求， 你也要遵循基本写作原则。